Sunday, September 24, 2006

Writing: Love and Sexuality is important in any genre

I am not a pure romance writer. Let me state that upfront. What I write is women's action-adventure fiction with strong erotic romance elements. It's a mouthful, I admit, but it's the truest way of knowing what I write. But, most of my fiction writing is considered romance--unless you're one of my male readers who say I write mainstream with hot sex scenes they enjoy. Since I started writing with the goal of being published, my writing has evolved as has my perception of what I write.

Every fiction book you read is based on the concept of love. Don't shake your head at me, listen while I explain. Love is in every book because love takes many forms. It's about the lack of love--like murdering or scaring someone. Or about finding love. Or about family love, national love, or even friendly love. The base of every fiction story relates to love and the lack of it. Love isn't just romantic, but encompasses a great many things. So, the next time you pick up a fantasy or action novel--ask yourself--what is the love theme of the story. You might just be surprised on what you discover.

Now, romance is about romantic love. It's about not having it at first and finally achieving it at the end. Romance books deal not just with realistic love, but with ideals as well. It reminds us of those days when we were head-over-heels in love, giddy with excitement, fighting it while knowing in our hearts that we want that chance to be with someone who loves us just as much. Men and women look at romance differently. But--it's not really all the different except in how the tales are presented.

Men are more driven on actions, on doing, on showing. Women like to know, to feel, to explore. A damn good romance novel will appeal to both sexes if it mixes both male and female aspects of love. It might be something as the hero buying her a small gift she wanted but hadn't asked for. He might not tell her that he bought it to make her happy--but he's showing love. For her, she might make him a meal, or even massage him, telling him how much he means to her. How he makes her feel. That's her showing love. When you can show both, including the misunderstandings, the not seeing what they mean--you deepen the process of falling in love.

I know some writers who write romance and have no sex scenes in their stories, but the makeout sessions are damn hot. There are other authors who have explicit sex scenes, exploring various facets of sexuality. *raises hand high* The physical expression of love is a huge thing for guys. For them it's the most visible way of showing they care. Yes, sex for sex sake is common, but when a guy cares--it shifts in how it presents itself. For women, it's the mental and emotional stimulation that helps bring the physical expression to that higher level.

Now, I explore sexuality a lot in my books--including menage, polyamory, couples of same sex and hetero couples. For me, sexuality isn't confined to one isolated view, but to multiple views that allow the full depth of love to be expressed physically and emotionally. Some people aren't comfortable with dealing on those areas, but within the idea of a romance--they're willing to explore those areas that they aren't willing to try personally for whatever reason. Which is why I enjoy writing those romances that stretch the boundaries, introduce concepts of polyamory, menage, and various other lifestyles like BDSM, etc. Sometimes by reading those books, the reader not only learns more about what it could be like if they tried, but they open up to others who are active participants in those lifestyles. It's that love of humanity thing making its way around.

For me, the challenge in writing erotic romantic adventure fiction is to make it believable even if it's paranormal or fantasy in nature. To make you put aside what you know and to enjoy the moment of the story--knowing that at the end--there will be satisfying resolutions and in some cases--the traditional happily ever after. Now, one thing to realize in my stories is that there is only one of my written, but unpublished stories that have a wedding occurring. My stories end with where they're in love, willing to work on the relationship and commit to each other on some level.

For women, it's this storyline--the meeting and the falling in love that really gets to women. It's a reminder that no matter how the relationship is now in their lives--that they can recall how they fell in love while renewing that passion by reading romance. Men for the most part get a bad rap about forgetting anniversaries, birthdays, etc. But for them, it's not the falling in love part that gets to them. It's the day in, day out of being with the woman they've chosen and that she's still there that reminds them of the power of love.

If men really want to know how many women view romance and being romanced--pick up a romance novel. If you've got a woman who's not quite the sweet, quiet type--you might want to pick up an erotic romance that pushes boundaries. See how the process of falling in love is presented and why women enjoy it so much. Every thing you do and more importantly, everything you say affects this process. When you're aware that if you just caress her cheek, smile at her and tell her she's fantastic and that she'll kiss you or blush--know that you're seducing her and she's responding to your cues.

Women--men like actions. Show them you love them. Hell, seduce them. Need help-- pick up those romance novels, find your favourites seduction scenes and put one together for him. Men like to be acknowledged for all they do to provide things, even if they don't share their minds and souls on how they feel. By showing them how to add the words to the actions, they'll start responding in kind. Remember that it's a two-way street: if you want to be romanced then you have to romance them in the way they need.

When I write romance or even an emotional scene, I look at it from both point of views--hero and heroine. I see who has the most impact and I write from that viewpoint. Sometimes we need to see the hero taking that step into expressing how he feels, even if he can't yet tell the heroine. Other times, it's the heroine's POV and showing how she goes out of her way to seduce the hero or even to show when she realizes she's fallen for him. For me, presenting both POV at various times allows the readers to bond with both characters and gives insight into how relationships work for both romantic and for friendship.

I write mainstream action-adventure fiction with strong erotic romantic elements. To me, nothing is more important than showing how relationships form and dissolve as life progresses, including during crises. Sometimes people find their soulmates, sometimes they find their heartmates. Othertimes it's a true friend that makes life better. What matters is how they learn, grow, and experience love in all its possibilities in the story--all while making sure that the story keeps the reader hooked. One good trilogy that to me epitomizes how romance and more blooms under crises is the Dragonlance Chronicles by Margaret Weis and Tracy Hickman. For those of you who are going, "what romance? What love?" you need to reread those books. You took in the relationships and encouraged them or worried on them without ever realizing that there was romance in the stories. My stories are more obvious, but most men seem to like them even with the happily-ever after endings.

Friday, September 22, 2006

Pushing Boundaries in Writing and Personally

Recently with all the weird and unusual things happening in my life, I managed to sit down and do something I've never really done before--I read a couple of my old books and compared them to my writing now. I'm surprised in how far I've come--and where I've changed when I said I wouldn't ever do that. LOLOL There are some things I don't do anymore that I need to reincorporate when I write that I stopped doing for who knows why.

While doing this growth check, I also looked to see how I've personally pushed boundaries in my writing. I don't mean just in the types of stories I tell, but also in pushing boundaries in emotions, character growth, sex scenes, and worldbuilding. One thing I've noticed is that I'm neither shy about writing about emotional growth of characters nor do I shy from tackling various sex plays or lifestyles.

Pushing boundaries is part of growth as a writer. You try new things--perhaps a change from 3rd person POV to 1st person--or perhaps going to Deep 3rd instead of just regular 3rd. Perhaps you might try something with paranormal elements or more suspense included in the plotline. Sometimes we lock ourselves into this set pattern of what we write and think we can't or shouldn't stray from that path. For me--I'm eclectic in what I read-- from romance, erotica, sci fi, fantasy, mystery, manga, non-fic, history, etc. Reflecting my interests often mean that I include elements of what I read. For example-- most people might classify Mark of the Blood as paranormal erotic romance. I classify it a bit differently-- main stream paranormal erotic action/adventure with strong thriller and romantic elements. Yes there is a HEA (happily ever after) but there is so much more to the book than just the romance--though for many that's the main reason they enjoy it. (I do like a good romance that's not like everyone else's.)

I want to touch on sexual boundaries. This is a touchy subject, but one I'm determined to touch upon. People who read my books often ask about the sex scenes in them. They want to know if I've acted out those specific scenes or have done what's in them. I often laugh at this because these people never ask me if I've killed people like my characters have done in defense or if I've ever met a vampire, etc. Often I answer the question by saying something like, "The scenes are the product of my imagination, though I can guarantee you that every scene can be accomplished in person as long as you're in decent shape." Let them figure out if I've actually done it or heard about it from a friend. My readers know I'm very open when it comes to discussing sex, sensuality, and love.

In a couple of my stories, there are menage relationships involved. For me to write about polyamory and menage sex was pushing a limit. Not due to whether or not I've been in anything similar sexually or relationship-wise, but because of bringing alive the emotional relationships for all the characters involved. There are some stories that lightly touch upon bondage, dominant/submissive relationships, and other types of "kinky" sex play and lifestyles. Again, it isn't the issue of my having done them or not, but whether or not I can bring to life those aspects in proportion to the relationship of the characters. When I push those boundaries, do I bring it to life for the reader and explain it so they understand it's perfectly acceptable so long as all parties are consensual and enjoy the kink in question?

I had been hesitant to push those boundaries as my readers expected hot, erotic, not deeply kinky sex from my stories. Though there were some scenes that touched some boundaries, it wasn't until I wrote Games Empaths Play that I crossed a lot of boundaries. I knew some of my readers might be a bit hesitant to read something that dealt with a menage a trois, especially since two of the participants were brothers...but the story deserved to be told, and it opened many people not only to what menage is, but that there are many varieties and subtle differences involved--depending on the people and their needs. For me, that story was a milestone--writing about something I believe is not only possible, but feasible for people who are wired for it-- polyamory.

In the sequel I have planned to GEP, I'll be touching once again upon menage/polyamory, but also on other sexual boundaries. I'm not doing it to be noticed in the erotic romance market, but because the second story deals deeper within the workings of the pt'vsha, sex slave, community. In some ways this loosely connected series always me to not only grow and expand my writing, but gives me a place where I can present the beauty and wonderfulness inherent in other types of sex play and lifestyles.

When there's time, I'll be pushing other boundaries--finishing my fantasy novel, working on my Arthurian series-- Avalon Returns, and exploring the balance between good/evil, law/chaos, and more. Each book teaches me something new, and I spend a lot of time doing research, talking to people and experiencing, if possible, the things I write about. Not only does it help with my writing--it helps me as a person too. Never regret anything that helps you grow, even if there are prices paid that hurt. Life is learning and growing--and no one ever said it was a painless experience.

The biggest thing I notice with my boundary pushing is that my readers give me the chance to do so--tell me what works, what doesn't work and why. While I might not agree 100% of the time with all they say, I do keep it in mind as I write. They do influence me on some level, but at the same time--I make sure I stay true to the story's heart. As I push the boundaries and grow as a writer, my readers also learn more too. A friend of mine once said that boundaries are just things you've not tried--they're neither good nor bad until you experience them and decide for yourself. I've always agreed with that theory, so exploring and pushing those boundaries have always been part of my life, including the writing career. If you've never tested a boundary you have, take a chance-- you might find that it's not as bad as you think or you might find that it's there for a damn good reason.

Sunday, September 17, 2006

How to Critique for Others and Yourself

One of the things that often come up by new writers, or even some who are finally submitting and get back a rejection is--- how can Ifind someone to critique or edit my work before I submit it to publishers? How can I make sure that when I check my work, or a friends-- it's the best it can be? These are good questions as finding solid critique partners is hard. Not everyone sees things in the same way, nor should they-- as we all are aware of different things in stories. But what if you have a CP (critique partner) and you're finding that they're not catching the same things they used to? What can you do?


First, let's talk about what it means to critique. Not everyone agrees. Some people think it means to read over it, catch glaring plot inaccuracies, misspelled words, awkward sentences, and other similar things. That's true, but it's also important to remember that you're there to catch bad writing habits that an author has, so they can fix them. You're now wondering about the time it takes to do a thorough critique. Remember-- not everyone asks for a thorough critique of their work-- they effectively tell you what they need you to concentrate on and ignore the rest, which is fine to do. Does this mean that if you're critting someone that you must be nice, polite, and gentle, or does it mean that you can rip them to shreds for every mistake? Actually it's both. Let's look at some things to remember when you're critiquing for another person and points to pick up.

What does a good crit consist of? Pointing out plot errors on a smaller level (a scene, each chapter) and on the larger scale (several chapters and through the entire book). This means if you notice something that is important suddenly pop up and it's something that should've been seen or at least casually noted before-- that's a plot inconsistency. If you see where there's a reaction and no discernable action to cause it-- that's an inconsistency. You notice that certain things can't be done due to realistic positioning and the lack of full description-- you note it-- it's a plot inconsistency as well as an unrealistic movement. Letting it ride because it sounds cool won't happen with a publisher's editor. So, if you want to help your fellow CP, tell them what's unrealistic so they can make it right-- thus impressing the editor with solid knowledge on how a complicated set of actions are done realistically.

Grammar is very important, though not as important as you think. Minor grammatical errors are expected by most editors. It's part and parcel of being in the moment as you write. CPs are there to catch items like passive sentences, awkward phrasings, run-on sentences, even words that don't fit the action or description. There are a couple of items that I've seen as both a freelance editor and as a CP that others do miss-- these are things that people have to "hear" to pick up on. Sentence structure. If a paragraph has many sentences starting with the same noun/pronoun meaning-- that paragraph reads passively. An overuse of "as" "but" "yet" "while" "then". It happens with these words, you can't avoid use of them many times, however, you can find other ways of phrasing your sentences that'll reduce the use of them. As critiquers-- your job is it point them out.

Let's see a couple of examples of writing where we can pick out the errors. Then we'll see if you saw what I did. Then we'll discuss one important thing that critiquers MUST learn how to do, especially if they crit the same people over and over. But first, let's do a couple of examples.


Cylene smiled as they walked out to the backyard. Cylene loved her backyard. On one acre of land, she had built a reflection pond in the heart of a maze at the back of her home. Darin, an architect, and a landscape genius helped make her dream a reality when she asked him to help her. She looked up at the Chinese lanterns that dotted along the outskirts of the maze and highlighted the area in a soft romantic light. She loved how the lanterns reflected the light from the stars in the sky.


What problems do you see in this paragraph? What would you recommend for fixing? What word choices would you suggest using instead of others? Do you find this paragraph active or passive overall? Are there any verbs that you'd replace? Why? Do you notice anything else that either stops the action or forces you to reread it to understand it? Mark all of those things. Now, let's look at a revised version.


Cylene smiled happily while they walked towards her specially designed backyard. On the one acre of land sitting behind her home, she envisioned a labyrinth with a reflecting pool as the crowning centerpiece. Darin, a landscape architect and good friend, transformed the dream into reality with his patented genius, for giving her and her friends a beautiful meditation aid. Gesturing towards the crimson Chinese lanterns that were carefully placed around the labyrinth to create a romantic atmosphere, she asked her companion, "What do you think of my favourite sanctuary?"


What problems do you see in this paragraph? What would you recommend for fixing? What word choices would you suggest using instead of others? Do you find this paragraph active or passive overall? Are there any verbs that you'd replace? Why? Do you notice anything else that either stops the action or forces you to reread it to understand it? Once you've answered those questions....let's talk about what makes the second paragraph better than the first.

The first paragraph was very amateur and basic. In fact, there are repetitive sentence structures throughout it. Notice how many times the sentences either had "Cylene", "She", or "Her". The best way to know if you're using too much of the sentence structure is this--- if you have six sentences and more than 2 are starting the same way-- you've got repetition problems. Now, read the original paragraph aloud. What do you notice about it? The way its worded, it sounds as if you're telling a story to another person. "Did you hear about so-and-so? He said......He then went.....Darin couldn't believe it....His coat...." That's passive writing. Those sentences are all telling what's happening, not showing when you look at them as a whole. If you're an author-- you want these pointed out. If you're critting for another writer-- if you want to really help them-- you point this out because editors will nail them for repetitive use.

Notice verbs in the first paragraph-- they're normal verbs, that convey the basic sense of action. However, they don't do anything to layer the scene with the senses. Do you see at least two senses per scene? Do you feel that the environment is alive in the scene, an active part of what's happening? Or do you feel like you're dealing with Talking Head Syndrome? What's THS? We'll cover this in the next critique lesson.

By offering other choices, or even rewording a sentence for the author to show them how to make it more active-- you help the writer to see how to fix their own writing. Any author who tells you that making any kind of changes to their words is changing their voice --- doesn't know what voice is. Tightening a sentence, using the components in that sentence isn't changing voice, it's helping to strengthen a story. If you, as a writer, can't handle people changing a couple of words or phrases to help show how to make things better-- you need to ask yourself if you're cut out to be a professional writer. Editors change words all the time--- and they don't have to ask your permission for it if you've violated the laws by using Passive, Repetitive, and Boring. If your voice allows those things in-- then you need to find a better voice as that one won't sell. Critting is used to make your voice better-- by showing you how to make your style and voice sing with active, senses loaded sentences and plotlines. Suggestions are just that-- suggestions, but you must learn that critiques aren't there to pander to you, but to help you strengthen your weakness and to engage your strengths.

Now we come to one of the most IMPORTANT points in critting for someone. Especially if you've critiqued for this person for a while. It happens to the best of us, but it can fought and rejected. What point am I talking about? It's--- They Mean This--- syndrome. When you know what an author means, but you're not seeing what's said-- you're dooming the author to getting loads of revisions from editors. What do I mean by this? When you know what an author meant in parts of their writing, and it's vague and you don't remind them to clarify things-- you're perpetuating a crime that editors hate. The editor will say..."This is what this says....change it." The author will say..."But what I meant is this..."

Unfortunately-- the author will not win this one. Ever. You might know the writing style of your CP enough that you unconsciously adjust the meanings to what's written, thus never pointing out they need to fix that part of a story. When you're critiquing another person....one you know well...you MUST MUST MUST guard against this. You don't help the writer if you mentally change what's there to what's meant. The readers don't know the author's intentions as they don't personally know the author-- that means if it's NOT clear by what's SAID...then what's MEANT doesn't mean shit. They must clarify to make what's said match what's meant. Please-- if you have any love for your critique partners-- do NOT let them get away with "This is what I meant.." Make sure you guard yourself against falling into that fatal trap-- it might be the reason your manuscript is rejected.

Your first homework exercise--- take out something you wrote a while ago and haven't looked at recently. Go through the first three paragraphs and try to see what errors you find by using some of these techniques.

Steps of Critiquing

What are the steps to doing a good solid critique? We've talked about things to look for, but how can you give a good crit without committing hours upon hours of time going through a complete manuscript? How can you be a solid, yet streamlined critique partner? There are some techniques I use when I crit, but I allow the fact that a crit is not as indepth as an edit and some things should be apparent after pointing it out the first ten times to an author-- they should be able to go through their manuscript and fix the rest of those errors. So, let's make a checklist of the major points to look for when critiquing for someone else.


• Passive sentences. The dreaded words of "was" "were" "had" "having" Any form of "to be" needs to be checked for. Any verbs ending in "-ing" need to be checked for passiveness. (Though remember-- they're not passive within themselves, only used in conjunction with those evil "to be" verbs.)
• Repetitive sentence structure. Do you see sentences starting the same way in one paragraph? What about in consecutive paragraphs? If every other sentence starts "She was" "She thought" "Heroine moved" or "Her arm twitched"...then you're looking at repetitive sentences.
• Problems with Action-Reaction. Do you see the response to something before it happens? Do you have to pause and reread the sentence to figure out what action is missing or if it follow the reaction? Note this to the author-- it means that they're putting the Reaction first...thus ruining the logical sequence of the story.
• Anything that makes you reread a paragraph. If you find yourself going, "Huh?" Reread it and note to the author where you had to reread and ask for clarification there because otherwise it'll frustrate the readers too.
• Gaping plot holes. Do you see where they're doing one thing, only a few pages later, they're doing something totally opposite with no reason given? Point it out.
• Problematic words that slow down pacing and are overused. "As" "then" "but" "yet" "while"
• POV (Point of View) issues. Anytime you see the POV change from one character to another without proper transitioning, scene breaks, or where a sentence is in another POV in the middle of the main POV-- note it. It's got to be fixed.
• Make sure you don't fall into the "What's Meant over what's Said" trap. Point out what's said and how it doesn't match what's meant. It needs to be fixed.
• THS-- Talking Head Syndrome. This is a biggie to note, and I saved this until last because it's the hardest to deal with for both the author and the CP.


What is THS? Talking Head Syndrome is where you have dialog with no tags, no action-- basically nothing that shows you what's happening while the dialogue exchange is quick paced. Let me give you an example of THS, so you can see it in action.


"You're an idiot for agreeing to see him."
"Am not!"
"Are too. Do you think he doesn't realize what's happening here?"
"He doesn't care and neither do you."
"I care, but there's not a damn thing I can do!"
"Of course not, why get involved when it means it might cost you something."



Notice the exchange-- it's fast and furious with tons of sarcasm tossed in.....or is it? How can the words alone tell you tone of voice? More importantly--- there's action. All you have are two talking heads yapping at each other. There are no senses used to convey emotions or anything to give us a clue as to how important this is. Now, lets look at a new version.


"You're an idiot for agreeing to see him." His fist slammed on the desk, toppling two picture frames. She flinched at the noise.
"Am not!" Charlee couldn't believe that he was being so arrogant. She knew Andre and the risk was worth it if she recovered the diamond. How could Dax think that she hadn't taken all precautions on protecting them?
"Are too. Do you think he doesn't realize what's happening here?" The look on his face was pure rage. Even after all this time, she realized, Dax had never found out the truth about that night with Andre. Did she dare correct him? "He's an asshole who would love to see this fail!"
"He doesn't care and neither do you. Andre doesn't know what we do, Dax." Rubbing her temples with her fingertips, she tried to prevent the throbbing in her head from growing into something more. She was tired of their posturing bullshit, but she needed that diamond back. These two men were the only ones who could help her-- if they just would stop hating each other.
"I care, but there's not a damn thing I can do!" His hand shot out, grabbing her arm, distracting her from the tension headache building up. She glanced up, catching a look of something-- anguish?- in his chocolate brown eyes. Anguish or not, she couldn't give in; there was too much at stake, more than she'd ever admit to. But how to get Dax to help?
"Of course not, why get involved when it means it might cost you something." The only warning she had was the tightening of his hand on her arm and the low, menacing growl.



See the difference? There's action, emotional responses and a layering of senses. You feel what's happening and hear the emotions. This is what readers want-- a deep, complex book that comes alive in their minds. You as the CP need to mention that while the author wants a quick, snappy pace-- the reader will need a bit more information and action to keep the scene in their mind and not have visions of floating heads talking.

This is just a small list that I use when I do a crit for someone. I don't go looking for everything wrong with a book, but I do keep watch for certain common problems that crop up. An editor goes deeper in the story, finding tiny inconsistencies, checking on facts, and highlighting ever grammar issue known to man. But if you can see and bring attention to the major things-- the story will be stronger for it. The author might not want to thank you at first for being a solid CP who does their job...but in the long run, you've done what they can't do-- see their work in a clear, unbiased light.

Being a critique partner isn't easy and sometimes people who are new to writing don't have the skills. But by following these basic steps, you'll begin to see how to critique better for others as well as yourself.